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Galaxy Ball

By Kris Garrett





Within a galaxy far from any other, it is a place of immense ferocious competition. Fortred the ruler of the planet Quifeza, watches in dismay as his all star football team the Shreds are subjugated by the defending champions of a rival planet, known as the flame wolves. The score ends at 17 to 51, this game was his team’s preceding chance at the playoffs. So many things go through his mind, but the thing that upsets him at most is he put the entire planets currency on the line. In other words, he forfeited his entire planets reserves! He is approached by the coach of the wolves.

“Your team isn’t too appalling, but we could have detained them to only three. We wanted the fans to have somewhat of an enjoyable game, here at your home stadium. You have Eight month’s to get all of your planets fortunes, to Cosbo.” Phelm tells.

The two go their separate ways afterward, heading to their individual locker rooms. Players from the winning team get interviewed on the field. Fortfred gives a long agonizing speech to his players, before leaving the dome sooner than customary. He travels over to a large capital building, where the globe leaders congregate. He enters the room to see that everyone was already in anticipation of him.

“You don’t have to inform us Fortred, we saw the ending fallout. We just need to know why you thought it smart to put this planet’s future in jeopardy; you took a huge gamble and lost!!” One guy says.

“Do you think it smart to sacrifice this planet over a team game!! You’re out of your **** mentality!! Did you really think the Shreds had a chance against the champions?! Come to life Fortred, this planet has the seven worst teams out of the planets in this intact galaxy. Now what are we supposed to tell our people?!!! Our teams cannot compete with any of the top 15, and you put everything on the possibility of them beating the unsurpassed!

Over thirty different people sit at the long table, in opposition back and forth! Fortred finally shouts over them all, getting everyone’s awareness. He takes a seat at the end of the table.

“I know I messed up big time, but I think there is a way I can renovate this. It will have nothing to do with any teams of this galaxy. I want you all just to listen in and don’t ask any questions until I am entirely finished.”

The room is soundless as he speaks undoubtedly. There is not much of a choice, which leads them all to agree with his bail out arrangement.

Days later

One of the greatest heroes acknowledged by the people of the mushroom kingdom walks through the castle. He looks around at the many different photos, lost in his bottomless train of contemplation. This is short lived.

“Mario, Mario get down here!! I think we might have some turmoil!” Toad yells.

The Plumber runs down the many stairs, looking out of a window. His eyes broaden to see what seems to be an multitude of un known creatures.

“Reside at this juncture; I’m going out there to see what this is all regarding.”

Toad grabs Mario by his appendage, keeping him from departing.

“Do you think it is Peach they are here for?”

“I don’t know, and won’t find out just standing around. Just stay here; I’m not sure what there intentions are.”

Mario pulls his arm from Toads grasp exiting the front entrance. The plumber looks around, staggered at the magnitude of the colossal assemblage. He takes a few steps forward, as two of them draw near him. They stop in front of him. Mario shakes a bit uneasy.

“Don’t be fearful human, we come in serenity. In fact we need the aid of you and numerous others, so listen very carefully. Before I continue further I need something established. Are you the ingenious Mario?” The being asks.

Mario gulps bewildered and fascinated on how the individual knows his distinctiveness.

“Mamma Mia, how did you know that?! What are you creatures?”

“Your query will be answered in time, but for now we have incredibly significant information for you. We come from a planet called Quifeza, and currently right now our planet has suffered in many different ways. To get down to the point, our prime problem is the cash! We almost have none left, with that said our people will give out given the fact we won’t be able to trade with neighboring planets.”

The plumber looks up puzzled, wondering exactly why this information is being given to him. The piece about the trading with other planets confuses him even further.

“I don’t see how this is my predicament, I couldn’t help you even if I sought to. By the sounds of it, your planet has lost over trillions and trillions of dollars! Not even the Princess would be able to assist you. Can’t your neighboring planets, help you guy’s out?”

“That is not how things work out; the leaders of each planet don’t help unless they are getting something in return. We have nothing to furnish; we pretty much have nothing left. But there is still optimism.”

“I’m listening.”

“I’ll try and make this brief, but the planets in our galaxy are all for competition! Particularly sports, I’m sure you are familiar with the sport called football. Any way, this is the only chance we can make the massive bucks. Do you follow?”

“I’m just wondering where you’re going with this.”

“We need sixteen teams to be put together. Just so you are not enlightened, I am talking about the NFL style football. The citizens of our galaxy would pay large amounts to see teams compete with each other, from another world. That sport is most popular among most everyone in our galaxy.”

Mario jumps back putting his hands in front of him.

“Wow hold on a sec, I don’t play that form of football! Do you understand what you’re asking of me, it’s a unmitigated l waste of time? Go find someone else from your home planet, or some place else. The sport itself is terrific, but why have you come to me? My answer is no”

The alien life forms are quite for a little while before discourse.

“What if I told you we have spoken with Donkey Kong and Bowser, who have both arranged to take part? I believe you are associated in one way or another with the two of them.”

Mario crosses his arms while looking up at them. A small smile escapes his face.

“I guess you can count me in as well, but you need to explain to me further how everything is going to go. How exactly is sports going to get your planet back up, do you know how insane that sounds? And how am I supposed to confide in you beings?”

“Trust me Mario, it will work. I will tell you some of the small details you will need to be on familiar terms with. Since you have agreed to join, is there a precise position you’d like to play? I know you haven’t really taken on this sport, but each team will be given four month’s to prepare.”

“I would like to play Quarter back!” Mario says smiling.

“A stadium will also be built for each team; the team captain/Quarter back chooses where it will be built. Our experts can put them together within two weeks. Be sure to notify your brother about these proceedings. You will be able to put a team together once all participants are on our planet. We will be back in five hours, be sure to meet us in this exact spot.”

With those preceding words, a huge space ship shines its luminosity over the aliens. They are zapped into the ship. Mario turns away for one second, and the space shuttle is gone. Toad comes out of the castle, standing next to Mario. He is thinking hard again, trying to figure out how they knew who he was.

“So what is it they sought after?”

“I will explain to you, when Luigi returns with the princesses.”

Many dimensions away

A Lombax works on the vehicle of a civilian. A large quantity of energy forms in the firmament, as a huge space shuttle appears shooting a huge radiance down onto the grassy meadow. The alien creatures are now on a planet called Veldin. The aliens head over toward the Lombax that works on a automobile, near a edifice site.

“I take it that you are Ratchet?” One of them asks.

He steps from behind the vehicle, surprised to see these mysterious beings.

“Yes I am what is it that I can assist you with?”

“We would like you to join a huge sporting event. I hope you are familiar with football!”

Ratchet listens as he is given the information. He is a bit skeptical with the whole thing, but decides to join in an attempt to help them out. The aliens decide to split up into three different space ships to cover more ground quickly, leaving the planet afterwards. Another portal opens over an island, where an orange bandicoot snoozes under a tree. An additional Bandicoot lifts weights nearby. The bandicoot drops the pounds as the aliens approach.

“Are you Crash bandicoot?”

“No, that is him over there. Is there a message you’d like me to give him when he awakes?”

“I guess that make’s you Crunch, you will also work well for what we necessitate.”

He is given the proposition, and agrees to their offer. He speaks for Crash and himself. Worlds away in a hefty city, lasers are being shot back and forth. A wolf jumps up with two blasters in his hands, shooting at a Fox who shoots back at him. The Fox jumps behind a wall.

“What’s going on down there Fox? Do you need back up sent to you?”

“Don’t worry about me Krystal; I want you and Falco to battle the enemies off in the sky.” Fox replies through his communications mouth piece.

A portal forms in the sky, getting the attention of both Fox and Wolf. A light from the ship shines in front of them both. The aliens appear in a flash; both Fox and wolf aim their weapons at them.

“There is no need for that; we come with no impairment Fox McCloud and Wolf O’Donnell.”

Wolf is so astounded that he unintentionally drops one of his blasters. Fox puts his weapon down to the side.

“We seek your assistance, which includes you both. I have been doing this for a while now, so don’t ask any questions in anticipation of me finishing.”

The same information is given to them, just like the numerous others. Both Fox and Wolf stand in place speechless. That is until a chuckle escapes from Wolf.

“I don’t know who you take me for, do you seriously think I would devastate my schedule helping a dismal species like you?! What you have asked of me is merely for boy scouts, enough said.”

“Did I indicate there will be a lot of money involved, for teams with captivating records?”

“Who do you think I am, you just got done saying your planet doesn’t have much left. You seem like a hypocrite in all integrity.” Wolf replies.

“You don’t pay attention much do you; some of the money we get from the spectators will go toward your compensation. The people from the surrounding planet of ours will be the one’s attending your games. They will also be able to watch from their homes.”

Wolf crosses his arms while lively.

“I think I might be interested in this, how long do we have to make a resolution?”

“I need an answer right now.”

Both Corneria fighters are soundless as the moment itself becomes intense! Fox steps to the side, contacting one of his teammates. Not even a minute passes as Falco descends his vehicle onto the ground. He joins by Fox and Wolf. The leader of the star wolf team has called off the attack, enforcing his pilots to retreat.

“Can either of you tell me what this is all about, shouldn’t we be attacking Wolf and his crew Fox?! What, have the two of you decided to take a break?” Falco asks a bit perturbed.

“Quite down Lombardi, these creatures have a promising proposition for us all.” Wolf explains.

Falco stands in place as the information is given to him. His eyes narrow a bit at some of the things, which are said. Nevertheless, he does not back down from a challenge, he is the first out of the three to agree to their terms. Both Wolf and Fox agree to it as well.

“I guess we lost track of time, which will change things a little bit. I’m going to ask the three of you to come aboard our ship now.”

A laugh escapes Wolf.

“Do you actually think I am that irrational to do such a thing? I don’t think so.” Wolf replies.

“I understand that you are concerned of your wellbeing, but I can assure you that none of you will be harmed in any kind of way. We must take you all back to our home planet, which is where the draft will take place.”

“What is the draft?” Fox asks.

“It is what will be the method for putting all sixteen teams together.”

The three of them agree to their terms again, as long as they could carry their weapons aboard. Krystal as well as panther joins them before entering. They do not return to their home planet instantaneously, the alien life forms continue to travel the many different galaxies recruiting participants. This ends after a while. The many different chosen players enter the planet of Quifeza, on different spacecrafts. Tiny Tiger steps out of a ship, looking around to see what appears to be hundreds of different inhabitants. Dingodile stands right behind him, as the alien race leads the enormous group into a large dome of some sort. The many participants start conversation amongst each other. A familiar blue hedgehog stands within the crowd, among a group of his allies.

“I can’t believe how much this place is packed; wow this is getting me excited!” Sonic tells.

Knuckles just stands next to him, with his arms crossed.

“You don’t seem too excited. We must have lost Amy and tails in this large crowd.”

Knuckles does not reply, as someone steps onto a podium in front of the crowd. The person picks up a microphone, as everyone quiets down.

“I would like to take this instant to thank you all for coming, as you know our survival is in peril. I will not go through all of the details on how we got in this position, all you need to know is we need each and everyone’s help in this showground. This event will consist of 16 teams, with 16 regular season games. There will be four teams to a division.”

Everyone listens as the rules and regulations are explained.

“Before we begin the main event, I want to inform you all of a few things. There will be twenty cheer leaders to a team, and you cannot purposely commit fatal hits on the field or you will be fined. If you can all look around in this dome, we have set up one area for each position. Go to the area of the position you would like to do.”

Each individual heads over to the area of his or her interest. It takes over twenty minutes before everyone is completely finished. Sixteen alien beings step onto the stage on both sides of the announcer.

“Before we begin I would like to introduce myself, I am Fortred known as the leader of this world. I would like to introduce you all to Fred, Joe, Chris, Hec, Ken, Dan, Wiley, Mark, Jay, T.J, zelph, Carter, Ralph, Greg, Tim, and Frank. These will be the owner of each franchise. It will be a gamble for them all, as none of you are players of this sport. That is why there will be four months of training camp, once you are on a team. And just like any team sport, if you are not wanted, you will be traded. If there are no more questions, the draft will begin now.”
To Be Continue
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(02-10-2009, 08:30 PM)koopaul Wrote: Say... I remember you posting this on another forum I visit.
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Galaxy Ball
Chp2: The draft






Someone approaches Fortred, whispering something in his ear. It seems to be something essential, which causes the man to shake his head multiple times. He clears his throat while putting the microphone up to his lips.

“All ladies within this dome can ignore what I am about to say, as there is only one role you can take part in. As far as the gentle men, the position that you currently stand in will not positively be the position you will play. Tryouts for each position will take place within training camp, after you have been selected to a team.” Fortred tells.

Everyone listens in silence as he continues to give them information.

“Before the draft begins, we would like to take about an hour to thirty minutes to see you all take part in some exercises. This way, it will give our team owners a better understanding of each and everyone’s physical endurance. That way they will have a less hard time choosing.”

The females are kept within the dome, as Fortred starts them up with running laps from the 10 yard line to the 30. He has them spread out on both sides of the field. Outside the premises, the males are escorted onto an enormous meadow. Once the group is put into different lines, a football is placed on the ground in front of each person who stands at the front of each line.

“I want you all to listen exceptionally vigilantly; the first exercise we will be performing is to see just how far each of you can throw a football. We will also be looking at your posture and style, so please do put forth effort. I don’t want any of you throwing a ball until your name is called, we will begin shortly.”

As he continues to speak, another group of men get the names of each person in the lines. It doesn’t take much longer as the event begins. A large machine is set on the field, which will record how far the ball goes by hitting the land on impact. Getting through the first Thirty Eight guys, the furthest thrown ball was for just twenty five yards. Fortred’s sport staff shakes their heads dissatisfied.

“We better start seeing something superior to this! Fortred’s entire plan could prove to fail.”

He looks down onto his sheet of paper calling up the next person.

“Up next is Link, from the Ordon village.”

The Hylian steps forward stretching his arms, before bending down and picking up the ball. He focuses in, practicing the motions of throwing the ball before he actually does. Taking a few steps back, Link finally steps up releasing the ball! It is a huge moment of silence with the ball gliding into the air with a perfect spiral. Link’s heart rate increases as he watches the ball continue down its path. The ball finally hits the ground way up field! The sport staff members all look up at the score board immediately, along with the many standing in line. Link’s eyes widen to see his score flashing on the board; he threw for Sixty Seven yards!

One of the staff member’s throws his clipboard to the ground.

“Now that’s what I’m talking about!! I want you all to give it up for Link!”

Most everyone applauds the Hylian, who just smiles astonished at what he had just done. The man recovers his materials from the ground as they continue on.

“Next up we have Vector the Croc.”

This individual throws for just Twenty seven yards. The day progresses on as many others show off their throwing skills. Link’s throwing distance is finally surpassed, as Donkey Kong throws for 78 yards! Many others show good potential at the position of quarter back. After some time, the sport staff members begin moving people into different groups. Using their stats and information from the exercise, they keep only sixteen participants out of the large group who showed the best potential. The sixteen of them stay within the quarter backing practice session. A group is created for every offensive and defensive position. If someone doesn’t do well in a group, they are sent to another.

“Well, you must be the lucky sixteen!” The guy says laughing.

He looks over the papers on his clip board, looking over the group of participant’s information.

“I’d say by the looks of it, all sixteen of you have secured your spot at the quarter backing position. Each of you threw for at least forty yards or more, with good balance and technique. You guy’s did much better than most everyone else. Remember that your spot can still change in training camp, but if you all are consistent and perform like you did today, you will be just fine.”

The group is then given some time to introduce, themselves amongst each other. Some of them do not require doing that with everyone, given the fact they have already met.

Mario walks over shaking hands with Sonic, remembering him from the smash brothers brawl tournament a decent period ago. The two of them are approached by Ratchet, who introduces himself. Luigi joins his brother’s side.

“This should be extremely interesting Mario, I had no initiative we would end up on separate teams. Regardless of that, it will be enjoyable if I have the fortune of playing against you.” Luigi says.

Sonic places a hand with on the back of Luigi.

“Don’t worry pal, I’m sure this entire occurrence will turn out to be a grand experience.” Sonic replies.

Captain Falcon starts a conversation with Jak and Link. It is not too much longer before; the group is given some more exercise to do. Throughout the elongated spacious pasture, the different groups continue to work intensely. As time goes by an hour turns into three hours! All groups are then finally taken back into the dome. This time each person is directed to which area they will sit within. Fortred re enters shortly after everyone has settled in to their position.

“Now that we have seen you all in some form of exercise, the draft is ready to begin. We will start with first round picks.” Fortred tells.

The majority of the mass applauds Fortred as he leaves the stage. The team owners look over the information of all the participants. The dome is enormously soundless. Hec looks up from the papers, making a resolution.

“For my primary pick, I select Knuckles the Echidna at the running back position.”

Knuckles is beyond shocked to hear his name being announced first! A good portion of the participants cheer for him, before going silent again. Wiley is the next to make a choice.

“For my first round pick, I choose King Dedede at the Linebacker position.”

This process continues for an extensive period of time, as each of the franchise owners continue to select players to their teams. This leaves some of the participants displeased, given the fact they are being separated from friends or family. It takes another few hours before this entire process is complete. Something that is clear for some of the teams, is that they are short a few players. Fortred steps back onto the podium.

“I’m sure you are all blissful that is over, now the fun itself will begin in another few days. I understand that a few teams are short players, but that will be fixed within training camp. To end this day off, I would like all team captains to come up here on the stage.”

The individuals do as they are told, and are directed over to their franchise owner where they will come up with their team name and location of the squad stadium. Everyone else just sits around waiting, as theses preparations are taken care of. The team names and locations are quickly selected. Fortred steps forward informing the rest of the participants of the updated information.

“We will give you all a little bit of time to say your good byes to family and friends, as you will be returning to the planet of where your team stadium will be built.” Fortred tells.

The participants take the time to do just that. Coco bandicoot, spots Crunch within the area of the running backs walking over to him. Crunch turns just in time to see her approaching.

“I just came over to wish you a safe voyage, as you should already know Crash and I will be together.” Coco tells.

“I’ll be just fine; I still find it hard to believe Crash made it at the Quarterback position.” Crunch replies with a laugh.

Coco thinks about it for a few moments, before laughing as well. Mario walks threw the mammoth multitude over to princess Peach who sits beside Daisy. He takes a seat next to them both putting an arm around peach.

“Too bad neither of you will be cheering on my team. Oh well, I’m willing to bet this whole thing will be fun.”

Peach can hear the disappointment in his voice, turning to him with a smile. She leans over kissing him on the cheek. This causes him to blush, Peach notices this and giggles.

“Don’t worry Mario; it will be just for a little while. After all this is over things will go back to being how they were.” Peach tells.

The plumber talks with the two of them, before they depart ways. It is not too much longer before all participants are gathered up, and put onto separate space shuttles which will take them to the appropriate destination. The space ships take off into deep space. Within a shuttle, Jet the hawk sits next to Captain Qwark.

“I understand that you are going to be the quarterback of this team, with that said you better be a darn proficient one. I only agreed to join this thing to help out these people, and to win. So when it comes game day, don’t go out and throw the game away for us.” Captain Qwark tells.

Jet’s eyes open, as he looks over at this individual.

“I don’t believe we’ve met, and already you are trying to tell me what to do. I’m someone who is all about competition, so you don’t have to worry about that.”

Jet turns away from him, closing his eyes again.


Planet Ireigiel


Phelm the offensive coordinator of the Flame Wolves enters a room sitting down. He is awaited by a group of persons. Cosbo sits at the other end of the table.

“Congratulations on your win over the shreds, a few days ago. I would expect that Fortred’s council will be sending payment soon. But that is not the reason I called you all here tonight. We have some what of a problem.” Cosbo tells.

He directs his assistant Elisa over to his desk. She returns throwing a few folders onto the table tops. Cosbo opens one of them, and has his assistant pass out the papers which are inside. She does this fairly quickly.

“As you all can see we are loosing viewers to our sports station. But it should be an easy problem to fix. I’m sure this is because of the slaughterer crows, Flame Wolves, ogres, blizzards, and clash Predators. They are the only teams as of late winning championships; viewers must be getting tired of it.”

Cosbo discusses with his staff on a way to resolve the quandary. A great distance away, a ship lands within the enormous city of Corneria. After all the passengers exit the ship, it takes off back into space. Falco Lombardi, being the only one accustomed with the conurbation leads everyone to the closes hotel. All check into the hotel except one. Tiny Tiger didn’t carry any money with him, leaving only one choice. Falco decides to take the big cat home with him. Pulling a contrivance out of his pocket, he uses it to call out the sky claw to his position. Falco turns to Tiny as the vehicle drifts down to the ground in front of them.

“Lets just get one thing straight; when we get back to my place I don’t want you touching anything. Hopefully we are clear on that.” Falco tells.

Tiny pats Falco over the shoulder while smiling showing his prickly teeth.

“No need to worry, I Tiny won’t touch a thing.”

Falco looks down at him with a frown, making it apparent that he is stern. Both beings hop into the vehicle, as Falco takes off into the night sky. The two of them arrive at his place promptly. Getting out of the vehicle Tiny looks around, and is impressed with what appears to be Falco’s weapon’s arsenal! There are missile launchers, blasters, many different types of grenades and weaponry! Falco opens a door, which leads them into the central section of his residence. Tiny is again enlightened by the way things are set up in this space.

“Wow who is she, Tiny is in love.” Tiny tiger asks, looking up at a picture while drooling.

Falco looks over at the picture, smiling under his beak after seeing who it is.

“Her name is Katt; I guess you could say she is somewhat a friend of mine.” Falco replies.

“Maybe you should call her, and see if she will join our cheerleading squad! Please, that would be a real treat?!” Tiny asks.

Falco attempts to say something, but stops. Thinking about what Tiny just said, he comes to a realization that it isn’t such a bad idea.

“I think we might do that, but for tonight we should just get some rest.” Falco replies.

Tiny follows Falco into his massive living room, which has a lot of furniture and a long black leather coach. Tiny leaps onto the coach sitting in front of a big screen T.V. Using the nearby remote, he turns it on.

“If you need anything Tiny just let me know, I’m going to be working on something upstairs.”

The big cat just nods as a form of response. Turning on a light, Falco walks up the stairs. Significantly far away a ship lands on the field of Hyrule, just outside Ordon village. The passengers exit, as the shuttle returns to Quifeza afterward. Link explains to everyone who is not familiar with his village, on how things work. After doing so, most of the participants decide to set up camp exterior of his village. The Hylian looks over at Zelda, who stands next to Peach.

“You should probably try and cover your features a little bit, if any of the villagers knew that the princess of their kingdom was here in this village, it could become chaotic.” Link tells.

Zelda smiles while wrapping a scarf around her head, over her hair.

“Luckily this will just be for a night; I’m going to take Princess Peach back with me to the castle tomorrow. Did they say exactly where the stadium would be built? It’s not really that important, it’s just so I can inform the kingdom choice makers it was my decision.” Zelda asks.

“I just told them it will be built on Hyrule field, about two miles from the city.” Link replies.

Everyone camps outside of Ordon village, except for Link, Peach, and Zelda. Out of the whole group, Banjo and King Boo don’t mind. Not trying to alert any of the villagers, Link directly leads both women up into his tree house. Zelda looks around, only to see one bed. She looks over at Link, placing both hands on her waist.

“Not to be rude or anything, but you only have one bed?! How is this going to work?” Zelda asks.

Link looks over at what appears to be a moody Zelda.

“Don’t concern yourself; the two of you will be sleeping in the bed while I take the ground.” Link tells.

Zelda takes off the scarf, and Link can see the relief within her face.

“Thank goodness, I thought you were going to say something else.” Zelda replies.

Peach giggles getting the attention of them both.

“What is so funny?” Zelda asks.

“It’s not really anything, but looking at the two of you talking back and forth I could see you as a married couple.” Peach tells, giggling again.

Link smiles while Zelda frowns.

“That would never happen; I am a princess of high class. My bride to be will be of a royal family.” Zelda tells.

Link’s heart drops at her words, not that he wanted to be with her or anything. Trying to escape the situation, Link decides to go get them all something to eat leaving the tree house. Peach turns to Zelda.

“I think you may have hurt his feelings, personally I think he is really cute.” Peach tells.

Zelda takes a seat on the bed, laying back.

“You shouldn’t worry, I’m sure he is fine.” Zelda tells.

Within subterranean space, Fortred’s inhabitants continue to search for participants to fill up the spots they are short. The group is very successful in their mission, coming across many individuals. They come across Princess Rosalina, giving her the opportunity of joining a team as the leading cheerleader due to her gorgeousness. She is updated on why the event is accruing, and is given the option of joining a team. Looking down on the paper, she recognizes a familiar name smiling! She decides to join that team, taking part in the affair.

To Be Continue
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The list of the teams, and which divison each team is in.


Division 1

1. Lylat Birds,
Home stadium/ Corneria

Key players

RC: Redy the red Yoshi
RB: Knuckles the echidna
QB: Falco Lombardi
RB: Tiny Tiger
RC: Espio

leading cheerleader
Krystal


2. Blood hounds,
Home stadium/ Venom

Key players

QB: Wolf O’Donnell
LB: King Dedede
RC: Bowser Jr.
RC: Boshi
RB: Dry Bones

Leading cheerleader
Rouge the bat


3. Primates
Home stadium/ Kongo Jungle

Key players

QB: Donkey Kong
RC: Diddy Kong
RB: Monty Mole
RC: Koopa turtle

Leading cheerleader
Dixie Kong


4. Seals
Home stadium/ Island

Key players

QB: Crash Bandicoot
RB: Funky Kong
RC: Skidd Mcmarxx

Leading cheerleader
Sasha/Ratchet series


Division 2

1. Mushroom Dashers,
Home Stadium/ Cool cool mountains

Key players

QB: Luigi
RB: Wario
RC: Koopa
RC: Fox Mccloud

Leading Cheerleader
Daisy


2. Golden Knights
Home stadium/ Field

Key players

QB: Ike
CB: Dingodile
RC: Skrunk
RB: Fly guy

Leading Cheerleader
Mist


3. Speed dodgers,
Home stadium/ Down town station square

Key players

QB: Sonic
RC: Shadow
RB: Samurai Goroh
LB: Big the cat

Leading cheerleader
Amy Rose


4. The Legends
Home stadium/ Hyrule field

Key players

QB: Link
RB: Crunch Bandicoot
RC: King Boo
RC: Banjo

Leading Cheerleader
Princess Zelda


Division 3

1. Ultra Bros,
Home stadium/ Isle Delfino
Key players

QB: Mario
DT: Petey Piranha
RC: Yoshi
RB: Shy Guy
RB: Storm the Albatross

Leading cheerleader
Princess Rosalina

2. Speedsters
Home stadium/ Big blue
Key Players

QB: Silver the hedgehog
RC: Charmy Bee
RC: Paratroopa
RB: Goomba
RB: Bio Rex

Leading cheerleader
Blaze the cat

3. Bleach brothers,
Home stadium/ Dream land
Key players

QB: Waluigi
RB: Vector the Croc
RC: Kirby

Leading cheerleader
Kate Allen

4. Reindeers,

Home stadium/ Veldin
Key Players

QB: Ratchet
RC: Toad
RC: Clank
RB: Paratroopa
RC: Rick Wheeler

Leading cheerleader
Talwyn Apogee

Division 4

1. Hammerheads
Home stadium/ Yoshi’s island
Key Players

QB: Jak
RC: Daxter
RB: Hammer Bro
RC: Gloshi

Leading cheerleader
Ashelin

2. Dragons,
Home stadium/ Bob-omb Battlefield
Key Players

QB: Koopa Troopa
DE: Bowser
RC: Meta Knight
RB: Blooper

Leading cheerleader
Tiff

3. Cheetahs,
Home stadium/ Cloud Spires
Key Players

QB: Jet the hawk
RC: Hunter
RB: Captain Qwark
FB: Michael Chain

Leading cheerleader
Wave the Swallow

4. F-Zero Brutes,
Home stadium/ Port Town
Key Players

QB: C. Falcon
RC: Kamek
RB: Blood Falcon

Leading cheerleader
Princia Ramode
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There are quite a few mistakes in there. Make sure you re-read.
Quote:Within a galaxy far from any other, it is a place of immense ferocious competition. (disorganised sentence, either get rid of "it" or rephrase) Fortred ,(the) ruler of (the) planet Quifeza, watches (I suggest "watched") in dismay as his all -star football team the ("The"?) Shreds are ("were" if you change tense) subjugated by the defending champions of a rival planet, known as the flame wolves ("The Flame Wolves"?). The score ends (ended) at 17 to 51, this game was (this is why I suggested you changed tense; you can't go from present to past) his team’s preceding chance at the playoffs. So many things go (went) through his mind, but the thing that upsets (upsetted) him at ("the") most is (was) ("that") he put the entire planets ("planet's", the currency belongs to the planet, so you need " 's") currency on the line. In other words, he forfeited his entire planets (same here) reserves! He is approached (right tense? you put everything in the present tense, which is not a good idea for a narrative) by the coach of the wolves ("The Wolves"?).

Yep there's a lot to correct, if there's only this much in one paragraph. The style of writing reminds me a bit of Pratchett or Adams.
I'm sorry if I may offend, but are you not a native English speaker? I'm asking this because some of the stuff here reminds me of German language structure; of course, I may be wrong.

Anyway, good story and style, just need to work a bit more on correction!
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(02-22-2009, 12:25 PM)Chris2Balls [:B] Wrote: There are quite a few mistakes in there. Make sure you re-read.
Quote:Within a galaxy far from any other, it is a place of immense ferocious competition. (disorganised sentence, either get rid of "it" or rephrase) Fortred ,(the) ruler of (the) planet Quifeza, watches (I suggest "watched") in dismay as his all -star football team the ("The"?) Shreds are ("were" if you change tense) subjugated by the defending champions of a rival planet, known as the flame wolves ("The Flame Wolves"?). The score ends (ended) at 17 to 51, this game was (this is why I suggested you changed tense; you can't go from present to past) his team’s preceding chance at the playoffs. So many things go (went) through his mind, but the thing that upsets (upsetted) him at ("the") most is (was) ("that") he put the entire planets ("planet's", the currency belongs to the planet, so you need " 's") currency on the line. In other words, he forfeited his entire planets (same here) reserves! He is approached (right tense? you put everything in the present tense, which is not a good idea for a narrative) by the coach of the wolves ("The Wolves"?).

Yep there's a lot to correct, if there's only this much in one paragraph. The style of writing reminds me a bit of Pratchett or Adams.
I'm sorry if I may offend, but are you not a native English speaker? I'm asking this because some of the stuff here reminds me of German language structure; of course, I may be wrong.

Anyway, good story and style, just need to work a bit more on correction!

my bad lol, the story is supposed to be in present tenseCool Thanks for pointing out some of my errors, I guess I should read over my stuff before posting it up. Yup I'm a native speaker, born here in Aurora Colorado. Thanks for pointing some things out.
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I didn't bother to read all of it but something strangely caught my attention.

What the hell does "Subterranean Space" mean?
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Ah :s :s
Sorry 'bout that, Raphaelmtnt ^^"
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Galaxy Ball

CHP3: Training Camp

A few weeks have conceded, as each and every team has been training vigorous within their arenas. Forted sits within an office with the rest of his council, discussing the details on when they will broadcast their event to the other planets. They decide to set up a press conference, with Fortred informing everyone.

Deserted Island

A stadium has been built for the seals that in whom practice routs. The ball is snapped to Crash who hands it off to Funky Kong, but is stopped at once. The defense read the play coming up the middle with a blitz. The play results in a loss of six yards. A defender helps Funky Kong to his feet, afterward both players get back on their sides of the field. The ball again is snapped to Crash, who takes a few steps back. He looks down the field for his Tight end a Goron gunning the ball into his chest! The offence picks up thirteen yards, before the player runs out of bounds. Everyone on the field wears pads helmets etc. Funky Kong Looks around, at everyone’s jersey’s which look to be over twenty years old and tattered.

“I can’t wait until they provide us with our actual attire, when game day begins in another three month’s! Hopefully our team logo doesn’t look screwy.” Funky Kong Whispers into Crash’s ear.

The bandicoot replies by just nodding.

“Alright everyone, we are going to run one more play before we send you all out on a break.” The team leader tells.

Crash has difficulties with the communications piece in his helmet, and has to walk off of the field to get the play from the offensive coordinator. After this is done, he runs back onto the field. At the line of scrimmage Crash sends Skid Mcmarx in motion. The ball is snapped to him, as the defense comes with a full force blitz! The Bandicoot looks up field and is hit as he throws. Skid jumps up to make the catch but it is too high, and ends in an incompletion. The team leader steps out onto the field.

“I want you all in the locker room within the next ten minutes; I have something important to update you all with. Afterward we will return back on the field for some exercises.”

Most of the players head directly to the locker room.

Dream Land

The Bleach brother players, all stand within their locker room suiting up. All of them get ready to take the field. All players do this hurriedly, as they know there is a lot to be done throughout the day. When on the field, the players set their helmets to the side. The head coach walks around with a clipboard to make sure that all players are on the field, calling off each name. This process is finished without delay.

“Alright gentlemen, before we begin our frequent practice session we will begin with some exercises. I want you all to be in great shape, so when training camp is over you will all scamper through our contesters!”

The group is sent off running laps from the end zone, to the fifteen yard line and back. They continue doing the same process, but switch to a different exercise after some time. One of the player’s slows down getting drowsy; the coach notices this and has the group go even longer. He has them stop after another few minutes.

“As a whole group you all did very well, don’t worry as we continue to exercise you will all get stronger. Over time it will get easier, I’m just pushing you all hard so that you will be ready! I would like to create a playoff team here in Dreamland; if you all work hard we can do it.”

The players listen to their coach speak aloud. After he is done talking, he gives the group a break before the official practice begins. The offensive players proceed to the field with their helmets ready to begin. Waluigi looks down at the plays he has strapped onto his arm. He calls his team into a huddle.

“This should be an automatic completion if you all do your part. This is going to be play hg4, a screen to WR Kirby. I need you players of the line to do a good job, unlike the last few days. Their blitz schemes are something that we need to overcome.” Waluigi tells.

The huddle is broken with the offensive players getting in position. The defensive players are on the field shortly and the session commences. The ball is snapped to Waluigi, as a group of defenders rip through the line and take him down. The defensive coordinator applauds his defense. Waluigi is helped to his feet by Vector the Croc. The Offensive players follow Waluigi back into the huddle.

“As I said before, I need the line to hold up for longer. This time we are doing play qs2, I want all receivers up field. If they are thinking, the defense will play man to man.”

The huddle is broken as each player returns to his proper position. Waluigi takes the snap and instantly can see the blitz. Waluigi runs to his right trying to avoid another sack, he is grabbed from behind as he releases the ball. This one is intercepted, but the defender doesn’t get far as he is tackled by an offensive line men. Waluigi shakes his head aggravated. He again directs his team into a huddle.

“We as the offence need to start putting something together, this defense has been destroying us for the past couple days now.”

Waluigi looks at the plays with on his arm band, choosing yet another play. The offence gets back in their positions. But this time Waluigi picks up the blitz before the ball is even snapped to him. He sends Kirby in motion. The instant the ball is snapped to him, Waluigi moves around in the pocket while looking up field. His line holds the defenders long enough for him to launch a rocket! The ball zooms out soaring into the air, with an almost perfect spiral. Kirby is alone with the closes defender a good five yards back. With much concentration the pink being jumps up making the catch! He runs for another fifteen yards before leaping into the end zone and celebrating. A smile appears on the face of Waluigi, very pleased with the play. It was a completion of 72 yards.

“That is what happens if you blitz us too much, eventually they will be burned for it. Just like this play.” Waluigi tells Vector.

The Croc smiles as well, ecstatic with the play. Kirby returns down the field only to be taken off to the side. Another receiver is put in, so that he could rest up after the long completion.

Hyrule Field

The team known as the Legends practice and train hard throughout their stadium. Link walks off of the field and over to the offensive coordinator. The Hylian puts his arm up, pointing down to a specific play on his arm band.

“I like the route Banjo runs on this play, but we have both seen his speed and I think his route should change. The other receiver is fine, but I think we should make some adjustments to this play, so we can hit Banjo up the field a little further.” Link suggests

The coordinator opens his play book, looking for Play S1. He finds it after flipping through a few pages, and looks it over. Looking over at Link he smiles while pulling out a pen.

“I’m definitely going to agree with your request; he is a very fast individual. You will now need to throw the ball to this point; the two of you just need to get the timing down.”

Link puts his helmet back on while walking onto the field. The Hylian gets back in his position. Link yells out something to his offence noticing something familiar from the defense. The ball is snapped to Link, who hands it off to Crunch. The bandicoot finds a hole to run through, lowering his shoulders he is taken down by two defenders. The play results in a gain of seven yards. Link takes his offence into a huddle.

“Good work so far today, you have all done fine. Lets try play av5.” Link tells, looking down on his arm band.

The offence returns to their standpoints. The ball is snapped to Link, faking the hand off to Crunch he looks up field. He punt fake’s to Banjo looking to the other side of the field he has a player open. Stepping up he throws the ball putting a lot of zip on it. King Boo makes the catch, but is pushed out of bounds after a gain of seventeen yards. The Offence moves up the field as they continue. The ball is snapped to Link, with defenders coming at him from all directions. The pocket collapse as Link runs forward, stopping in place. The Hylian launches the ball into the air! Banjo is double covered running into the end zone all three players jump up for the ball. Surprisingly Banjo comes down with the ball! Link and the rest of the offence are thrilled, by his great effort. Banjo along with the defensive players walks down the field to return with everyone.

“Wow Banjo that was a really amazing catch. You sure do have good hands.” Link says.

Banjo walks over to the Hylian, patting him on the shoulder.

“I couldn’t have done it without the tremendous pass.” Banjo replies.

Link responds by smiling. The head coach walks onto the field.

“Before I send you all out on your thirty minute break, we are going to practice the two minute drill. It is quite apparent that you are able to put away a game when on top.”

Players on both sides of the ball get into their spots, getting ready for the exercise. A few miles away, Princess Peach enjoys a hot bubble bath within Hyrule castle. The princess looks up at the ceiling, thinking about her kingdom. It bothers her, not knowing if everything is ok. Her thoughts are interrupted as someone knocks at the door. She slides up revealing the upper part of her body.

“Who is it?”

“No need to panic Princess Peach, I’m just a messenger sent from the central vestibule. I’m just letting you know that Princess Zelda will be returning to the castle within the next ten minutes.”

“Ok, thanks.”

The guy leaves afterward. The Princess finishes shortly after, stepping out of the tub drying off with two towels. She wraps one over her hair, and the other over her body. Making her way out of the bathroom she feels refreshed, leaping onto the bed laying back. It isn’t long before the door to her room is opened. She looks up to see Zelda, who closes the door behind her.

“I hope your enjoying your stay here in Hyrule so far. We have cheerleading practice this evening, but afterward we are going to have dinner down in the dinning room. Their will be a lot of guests, I just thought I would inform you.” Zelda tells.

Peach sits up looking at her, as the two of them smile.

“That sounds good.” Peach replies.

Zelda leads Peach over to a closet so that she can find a dress to wear for the occasion.

Down Town

Station Square

A stadium has been constructed and built for the Speed Dodgers. Special shoes have been provided for Sonic, Shadow and anyone else who has over the top speed! It slows them down to a playing level of almost everyone. Sonic hands the ball off to Samurai Goroh, who runs up the middle breaking tackles. He is finally taken down after a gain of twelve yards. The offence moves up, before getting in position again. The ball is snapped to Sonic, a blitz is preformed by the defense, but the line holds. This gives sonic time, punt faking to Shadow he throws the ball to his tight end. They pick up nine yards. Sonic decides to take his team into a huddle.

“Nice job everyone, I especially want to give credit to the line you guy’s are giving me loads of time to do things. Anyhow let’s go with RL2.0, I smell the end zone. These guys’s are probably expecting us to try and pick up small yards.” Sonic tells.

The huddle is broken up, as the players get in their rightful spots. Sonic sends one of his receivers in motion as the ball is snapped to him. The hedgehog steps back looking up field, smiling. He bullets the ball into the air with a flawless spiral, Shadow out runs everyone with the closes defender ten yards behind him. Shadow looks over his shoulder, making the catch running into the end zone for a 51 yard completion. A lot of defenders shake their heads over the blown coverage. Shadow returns down the field with the ball.

“Great catch pal, couldn’t have done it better myself.” Sonic tells Shadow.

The head coach comes out onto the field, informing the offence to practice a hurry up offence.

“This should be fun, I’m all about speed.” Sonic adds.

Both the offensive and defensive players get into their positions. The ball is snapped to Sonic who runs to his right, seeing nothing open he tosses the ball to his running back. Samurai Goroh picks up over four yards. The hedgehog gets his players to the line. The ball is snapped to him. Sonic guns the ball in the direction of Shadow, but a defender knocks it away. Sonic has the ball snapped to him again, but this time a defender comes in un touched taking him down for a loss of three. The hedgehog gets up instantly shaking it off.

“Watch for the blitz guys, we can’t afford to give up yards.” Sonic tells.

Sonic signals for the ball, as it is snapped to him immediately. The Hedgehog scuttles around within the pocket; one of the line men falls over as two defenders come through. Sonic does the smart thing and makes a run for it. He dashes off to his left where there is a great deal of just green grass in front of him. Sonic picks up fourteen yards before he slides down.

IsleDelfino

A football stadium has been built for a team called the Ultra Bros. Mario runs around in the pocket trying to get away from the pressure, but is sacked by Petey Piranha for a loss of 8 yards. Petey helps Mario up, as they both get back to their set positions. The ball is again snapped to Mario who hands it off to Storm the Albatross. Petey Piranha comes from the side taking him down for a loss of three yards. The entire defense applauds the plant for his great effort!

“I can tell you this for sure when it comes to playing the many teams in a few months; Petey will really be a difference maker on defense. He has been making big stops for the last few weeks.”

The defensive coordinator talks with the head coach. Mario decides to take his offence into a huddle.

“Mammia if we want to get something going, I need at least two to three guys blocking Petey. He is just too dangerous.”

Mario discusses with his line men on what he wants, and calls the play afterward. Heading back to their places, Mario feels a bit more confident. He takes the snap, stepping back a few yards the defense comes with a blitz. The plumber slides to his left, looking up field. Petey and another defender break through the line coming after Mario who steps up to throw. Yoshi makes a perfect catch fifteen yards up, but is not taken down instantly as a defender misses the tackle. The dino runs for another ten yards before he is brought down. It results in a completion of twenty five yards.

“That is more like it, but aside from that we have one tough defense.” Mario says.

Shy Guy shakes his head agreeing. All players move up the field, to the point of where Yoshi was stopped. Mario signals for the ball and gets it, stepping back a bit. He finds Yoshi, launching the ball into his chest. The Dino makes the catch but is taken down by Petey and another defender. They only pick up five yards on the play. The head coach yells out on the sideline getting everyone’s attention.

“That will be enough for today, you guys can head into the locker room and go get cleaned up.”

Everyone does that except for Mario, who notices someone sitting over on a bench. He walks over to the individual taking a seat next to her, and taking his helmet off.

“What are you doing here so early? Doesn’t the practice session for you all begin in another hour?” Mario asks.

“Yes that is true, but I thought I’d stop by a little earlier so that I could see you.” Rosalina tells.

Mario smiles while giving her a hug.

“That is really nice of you; I will see you at the hotel back on Sirena beach. I need to go get cleaned up.” Mario tells.

“Ok see yah later.”

The princess takes another lick of her chocolate snow cone, watching Mario heading to the locker room.

Corneria

It’s somewhat of a cloudy day in the city of Corneria. The team known now as the Lylat Birds, practice within their stadium. Falco Lombardi takes the snap, having no receiver open he dumps the ball off to Knuckles the Echidna who picks up two yards. The players get back in position, with the ball being snapped to Falco again who hands it off to Tiny. the tiger runs over the defenders picking up Twelve yards before running out of bounds. Falco heads up the field with the rest of the players. Immediately he takes his offence into a huddle.

"We don't have much time left in this practice; this will most likely be the last play so let’s make it good."

Falco looks down on his armband, making a decision. Back in their positions, Falco takes the snap. He looks up field to see the defense playing man to man coverage. Looking for his best receiver Espio, he throws into double coverage! It is caught by his receiver in the end zone.

To Be Continue
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(02-22-2009, 12:25 PM)Chris2Balls Wrote: There are quite a few mistakes in there. Make sure you re-read.
Quote:upsets (upsetted)

Upsetted is not a word. Past tense of upsets is upset.

I didn't read it, but WOAH WALL OF TEXT but. w/e. I skimmed.
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I don't think anyone bothered to read this

because its a cliche crossover where every single videogame character just fights each other for no reason.

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