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[Fanfic] Tetsuwan Atom: The Tragic Flower of Life
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Plot: Katari is displeased with the fact Inspector Tawashi became trustful of robots, due to that the anti-kokoro activist hire a assassin called Alexa who hate police officers due a incident which occurred five years ago.
Alexa have the habit of killing her victims with a special poison called "Black Widow" and the only cure is a rare flower called "Flor da Vida" (flower of life) which only bloom at the brazilian rain forest during the spring.

However, the flower will wither if the antidote is extracted once.
Unfortunatelly, Mimi who was talking with inspector Tawashi about Katari ends up hit by the dart and poisoned instead.

Katari then change his plans to lure Atom and Inspector Tawashi to his hideout alone, otherwise the "Flower of Life" will be burnt.
With this, he expect Alexa to kill Atom since he is unable to fight humans.
To make things worse, Mimi only have 12 hours of life if the antidote is not given...

Atom looks at a ring and cries...

Atom (crying): Why everything had to end like that?

Atom then remembers of somebody's final words...

"Please, give that ring for her once she awoke up."

There is a special reason for having that ring in his hands and is the reason which now Atom cries...

Everything started at Dr. Ochanomizu's house...

Atom (getting ready to leave): Well, I'm off!

Robita: Atom, do not forget to take a energy capsule with you.
You may need it later!

Atom (getting the energy capsule): Thanks, Robita!
I'll make sure to use it when my energy goes low.

Uran (surprised): Where you going, Big brother?

Atom: I'll meet Mimi in the central park!

Uran: Is that a date?
Aww....

Atom: Uran!
Do not tease me!!
Mimi wants to see me, because she saw Katari last night.
He escaped again from the jail and nobody knows what he can do.

Uran (shocked): Katari...
That guy is so heartless...

Atom: I know, but I'll only bring him to justice!

Atom open the door and...

Atom: Alright, I'll see you two later!

Robita: Take care, Atom!!

Uran: Do not let that bad guy hurt people again!!

Atom: I'll do my best to capture him again!

Atom goes flying and he meets Mimi one hour later at the central park...

Mimi: Thank you for coming, Atom!

Atom: Hello, Mimi!
Are you alright?

Mimi: I'm fine!
But, let's talk about Katari!
I've seem him in a black car yesterday night.
I'm sure it was him, but I am not sure if he saw me too, but I bet he is up no good.

Atom: I wonder why there are humans like him...
What he did to the robot farm was terrible.

Mimi: That's not just the problem, he keep deceiving people and tricking them.

Meanwhile in Katari's new stronghood...

Katari (watching the news about Inspector Tawashi who now leads a robot squad): What a hypocrite...
Before he was distrustful of robots, but now he is even leading a robot squad.
A fool like him do not deserve to live!!

Katari made a call and...

Katari (doing the phone call): Hello, Alexa!
I've got a job for you and it's a job that you'll surelly don't refuse.
I'll give more details once you come.

Several hours later...

Alexa: What's the matter, Katari?
Which job you need me to accomplish?

Katari: There is a stupid inspector of the police who once was distrustful of robots.
Now, he even started to lead a squad filled with robots who have kokoro.
I want you to get rid of him!

Alexa: A hypocrite police officer...
That's what I hate the most!
I'll do it!
But, I'll don't kill him quickly!!
Police officers like him must suffer with the poison "Black Widow".
None of my victims survived...
So, if poisoned all he'll be able to do is to have a horrible pain and dispair...

Inspector Tawashi arrive in the central park with Chief Nakamura...

Inspector Tawashi: Hello, Atom!
What you're doing here?

Atom: I'm looking for informations about Katari who fleed from the jail yesterday.

Inspector Tawashi: Katari...
That man did a prison break and escaped with other known criminals...

Atom: Don't tell me that Skunk was involved...

Inspector Tawashi: No!
Skunk and his gang were sent to a special high security prison located outside Metro City.
But, I don't think he'll last longer there.

Chief Nakamura: By the way, Inspector Tawashi!
It's been two years ever since Alexa stopped her activities.

Inspector Tawashi: Alexa...
She don't know the truth about the incident which turned her into a assassin.

Mimi: Assassin?!?

Chief Nakamura: It's quite a sad story...

Meanwhile...

Katari (hidden in a car): Your target it's that man with top hat and strange moustache.

Alexa: I've seem him before...
A hypocrite police officer like him is better as dead...

Back to Atom...

Mimi: Inspector Tawashi!
I've seem Katari yesterday night while I was with my grandpa crossing the street.
He was in a black car and I'm not sure if he saw me.
Please do everything possible to capture him!

Inspector Tawashi: I'll do my best!
Though, both Atom and the robot corps will have to get in agreement in order to make it possible.

Mimi: Thank you!
Katari is so cruel and a liar...
He saboted our central computer and even tried to frame the robots...
What he did to the robot farm almost made me lose the trust in everyone...

A dart is launched and hit Mimi who suddenly moved in front of Inspector Tawashi....

Mimi (hit by the dart): Ahhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!

Atom (who quickly helps Mimi): Mimi!!!

Inspector Tawashi (shocked): A dart?!?
It can't be...

Meanwhile...

Alexa: That kid got in the way at the last moment...

Katari: Let's get outta here, before they notices!
I'll have to make a little change in our plans.

Katari flee while everyone set their attention in Mimi...

Mimi (being helped by Atom): I'm not... feeling well...
It hurts everywhere...

Inspector Tawashi (laying his hand in Mimi's forehead): It's a fever...
These symptoms are caused by the poison "Black Widow"!!

Atom: Mimi!!
Be strong!!

Chief Nakamura: Let's bring her to the hospital quickly!!

Inspector Tawashi: "Guess I was Alexa's target now...
But, that poison have no antidote..."

Inspector Tawashi looks at Atom and...

Inspector Tawashi: Atom!
Get rid of that dart!!
It's extremelly dangerous and we lost a partneer who accidentally poisoned himself two years ago.
Pulverize it!!

Atom: Alright!!

Atom quickly throw the dart upward and he destroy it with his finger laser...

At the Science Ministry...

Dr. Ochanomizu (attending the phone call): What??
You have the antidote??

Mysterious voice (from the phone): Yes!
The only cure is the "Flor da Vida", also known as "Flower of Life" which only bloom at the brazilian rain forest during the spring.
If you want to get the antidote then send both Atom and Inspector Tawashi to the mountainside HQ which lies at the city outskirts.
However, if both Atom and Tawashi don't go alone, then the antidote will be destroyed and the girl will die.

Dr. Ochanomizu (attending the phone call): Who are you?!?

The phone call just ends...

Dr. Ochanomizu: Sigh...
What's just now?
Anyway, contact Inspector Tawashi and give him the details of the call immediately.

Yuko: Alright!!

At the hospital, Mimi is delirating from the poison...

Mimi (in the bed): No...
Go away... Go away, Katari!!!

And outside the room...

Atom: Doctor...
She'll be alright??

Doctor: Unfortunatelly that's a rare case of poison and there is no cure...
She'll be agonizing and die helplessly.
We got several victims who died in the same way, since no antidote was found.

Atom: It can't be...

Inspector Tawashi enter in the hallway and...

Inspector Tawashi: I've got a contact from Yuko of the Science Ministry and she said the culprit have a antidote for the poison.
However, it's a trap...

Atom: Although it's a trap, we cannot just let Mimi die like this...

Inspector Tawashi: My thoughts, exactly!
We'll have to go to their hideout together and without reinforcements, otherwise they'll destroy the antidote.

Meanwhile, at Katari's stronghood...

Alexa: In the end a child ended up being my victim, how pity.

Katari: That brat is better off as dead...
If more brats like her, who got corrupted by the robots, dies then the world will be a better place.

Alexa: Are you sure about it?

Katari: Just mind your new objective!
This time, kill both Atom and Tawashi!
Atom is a robot, so he'll be unable to fight a human.
Just send both Atom and Tawashi to hell and is all what matters now!

Alexa: Very well...

Alexa looks at the "Flower of Life" and...

Alexa: "It's a pity, but a job is a job...
So, I'm not giving you to that little girl."

Meanwhile at Dr. Ochanomizu's house...

Uran: Boring...
Boring and boring...

Robita: What's the matter?

Uran: With big brother gone, I don't have anyone to play...

Robita: If is that so, then why you don't take a walk?

Uran: Ah!!
Good idea!

Robita: But, take good care of yourself and don't go picking fights!

Uran: What!?

Robita: I do know that you acted as Red Mask and fought Dr. Minimini last week.
So, do not overdo yourself...
Remember that you're much more fragile than Atom and your existence is much more important than just fighting for the sake of fighting.

Uran: I know...
Senseless fighting doesn't appeal to me, living a happy life is what matters.

Robita: That's good!
But, you'll be grounded if you try to fight in a Robot Crush arena.

Uran: What?
You don't believe me?!?

Robita: Just saying!
So, do not get weird ideas!!

Uran: Ok...
But I really think these robot crush battles are too scary...

Uran open the door and...

Uran: Bye, Robita!!

Uran walk around the city and...

Uran: "Hmm...
Robita is right...
It's not worth to try pick fights, but at least I can find other ways to help others without violence."

Uran looks around and see a grocery store...

Uran: "They're selling parfait...
I always wanted to taste it!!"

Then Uran sits in the chair and...

Waiter: Do you wish something, little miss?

Uran (sitting in the chair): I would like to order parfait with strawberry and chocolate!

Waiter: As your wish!

Then the waiter comes and...

Waiter: Here it is...

Uran pays for the parfait and taste it...

Uran (overjoyed): It's so delicious!!

Waiter: Thank you for your partonage!

Uran: "Now I understand what older model robots are missing...
Too bad they cannot taste such a delicious dessert!"

Meanwhile, Atom and Inspector Tawashi travel to Katari's stronghood and...

Inspector Tawashi (driving the patrol car): We are almost there!

Atom (in the patrol car): Inspector Tawashi...

Inspector Tawashi (driving the patrol car): What's it, Atom?

Atom (in the patrol car): Who is Alexa?
And why she tried to kill you?

Inspector Tawashi (driving the patrol car): Alexa was the wife of a police officer called Shinobu Akayama...
He was a officer who always putted the job above everything which displeased Alexa so much...
Since she was most of time lonely...
Then one day, without warning...
Shinobu and a criminal were found dead, due to that the only culprit was Alexa who disappeared in the same day...
Later several police officers were poisoned by a unknown type of poison and they died since there was no antidote.

Atom (in the patrol car): So, it was the "Black Widow" poison...
But, how you know that poison's name?

Inspector Tawashi (driving the patrol car): I've found anotations in Alexa's latest residence before commiting her 3rd murder...
But, she escaped from us everytime we tried to catch her...
This time, I hope she can listen a recording of Shinobu which he apologised for not spending much time with her and as well his wish of retiring from his job to get a happy life...

Atom (in the patrol car): That's quite sad...
In the end, he realized that he should live a more peacefull life, but got killed by her...

Inspector Tawashi (driving the patrol car): I believe that there was a reason for the murder of Shinobu, however it's surelly a very tragic one...

And in a cliff near the hideout...

Katari: Your mission starts now, kill them!
Since Atom is a robot, it's pointless using the "Black Widow" again.

Alexa (with a gun): They'll don't even know where that blast will come from!

Inspector Tawashi see the hideout and...

Inspector Tawashi (driving the patrol car): It's there!

Atom (in the patrol car): Katari's stronghood...

Suddenly a blast is shoot at the patrol car and...

Inspector Tawashi (shocked): What's that??

Atom (in the patrol car): We got shot by something!!

Meanwhile...

Alexa: That's a electrical disrupting gun...
Even a robot like Atom will don't be able to escape from it...

Katari: Very well...

They see the car falling to the other side of the cliff and exploding...

Katari: Go after Atom to ensure that he is dead!!

Later, Alexa goes to the crash site located in a mountain and sees Inspector Tawashi's hat burned...

Alexa: "That was a huge explosion that a human could have been pulverized..".

Suddenly, Alexa hear a voice...

Atom: Alexa!!

Alexa (surprised): Atom...
So you're still alive...

Atom: Why you hate police officers so much?

Alexa: A souless robot like you would not understand...
So be it, I'll tell you...
I was once married with a police officer...
He was a very valent one and he keept putting his job above everything else!
One day, a criminal came at my house and I was held hostage.
My husband rather than caring about my safety fought that criminal and I was left frightening once that criminal lost the grasp.
There was shots everywhere and I was in deep dispair...
Imagine, the person which I loved didin't even said to me take shelter and I was helpless...
Then, I had found a gun which the criminal had dropped...
With this I have fired everywhere and when I realized, both my husband and the criminal were dead...
Due what I had to deal, I started to hate ALL police officers.
They talk about fighting crime, but they DON'T know true justice!!

Atom: Alexa...
You should not have made a killing spree because of what happened...

Alexa: Silence!!

Alexa starts blasting on Atom and...

Atom (flying): Stop this, Alexa!!
I cannot fight you!

Alexa: Then I'll kill you!!

Alexa blast Atom with a gun which can neutralize his energy...

Atom (being hit): My energy....

Atom falls away from the mountain...

Then Katari appears and...

Katari: Well done Alexa, with this Atom may be dead for good!!

Alexa: So, what's the payment for the job?

Suddenly a dart is shot at Alexa's back and...

Alexa: Ahhhhhhhh!!!

Terrorist 1: Heh, heh, heh!!

Katari: Do you really thought that I would enter in an agreement with a dirty assassin like you?

Alexa collapses and...

Alexa: It can't be...
It's the "Black Widow"...
How did you?

Katari: I also did a little research after learning of your existence...
So, I stole a dart which was proof from the police.
It's ironic, isn't?
Now you'll die from the same poison which YOURSELF created!

Alexa (agonizing): Back stabber...

Katari: I knew that you could go against our plans once you had hit the little girl accidentally.
She should just die, no matter if your mission was a suscess!
That was the perfect chance to eliminate both Atom, Tawashi and that pitful brat named Mimi who I failed to get rid myself last time.
If she dies, then robots of the robot farm may become hateful of humans and that reason is what we need for our cause.
And then, humanity will make a decree which robots with kokoro should be hunted and destroyed!!

Alexa (agonizing): So, it wasn't just Tawashi which you wanted.. to die...
You wanted that girl to be poisoned, so the robots who were her friends would snap and attack humans...

Katari: Exactly!
Robots with emotions should not exists!
If humans let things like this then the robot kind will terminate humanity one day!!

Several other terrorists came and...

Katari: Put her in the jail!

Terrorist 2: Yes, sir!!

And then...

Katari (who put the "Flower of Life" away from the jail cell): Here is the "Flower of Life", try reach for it if you can!

Alexa (agonizing in the jail and unable to reach the flower): Curse you...

Katari: There might a chance of Atom surviving the attack, so I and my soldiers will have to patrol the area to ensure that he is dead.
As for you, just agonize to death!

Meanwhile, Atom recover from the blast and get out from the water...

Atom: My energy has gone to the red line...

Atom take out the energy capsule and drink it...

Atom: Alright, it still works!

Then, Inspector Tawashi appears and...

Inspector Tawashi: Are you alright, Atom?

Atom: I am fine and my energy is filled up!
By staying at the patrol car, I was able to save a lot of energy.
So, how about you?

Inspector Tawashi: I've passed out when we were about to crash and then I awoke up recently after hearing shots everywhere...

Atom: That shock was really tough, huh?
I'm happy that I have protection against these electrical disruption blasts...
But, I never thought that Alexa had a gun capable of neutralizing energy...
At least the energy capsule wasn't affected.

Inspector Tawashi: In any case we must be careful, there must be a lot of enemies patroling the area.

At Mimi's hospital room...

Mimi (in the bed and agonizing): So painful...

Suddenly somebody lay a hand in Mimi's head who appears to have a dream...

????: Don't give up, Mimi!!

Mimi looks up and...

Mimi: Uran!?

Uran: Don't worry, big brother will give the antidote for sure!
So, please stay firm till he comes!

Mimi (smiling): Uran...
It may be just the effect of the poison, but...
I'm really happy to see you...
Probably you'll laugh when I talk about seeing you in my dream...
But, I'll don't give up!!

Meanwhile, Uran leaves the hospital room and...

Uran: "I decided to make a sudden visit to see how she was doing...
When I've laid my hand at Mimi's forehead, she started to smile.
I wonder what she was dreaming?"

Meanwhile at Katari's hideout, Atom and Inspector Tawashi finally invade the complex and...

Atom: There are no guards here...

Inspector Tawashi: Do not be fooled, they may be hidden somewhere!

After walking more, they find Alexa's jail cell...

Alexa (agonizing and surprised at the jail): Atom and Inspector Tawashi!?
How did you survived??

Atom: I escaped from the car and saved Inspector Tawashi's life who colapsed after the car was struck.
I also had a energy capsule to recharge myself after you disabled my energy.

Alexa (agonizing in the jail): Why you decided to face all these odds to come here?!?

Atom: My friend is agonizing in the hospital, because of you and I need the "Flower of Life" to save her life.
No matter what you did, you should not give up of loving others and being loved!

Inspector Tawashi: Mimi was a previous victim of Katari and she don't deserve to die like this!

Alexa (agonizing in the jail cell): The power of loving others...
And I even forgot about that beautiful feeling...

Atom bend over the bars and...

Atom (looking at Alexa's ring): Look, you still don't forgot the person which you loved!!
Alexa, you should not be a cruel woman.
You must face your crimes and try to start over once you're free once again!

Alexa (agonizing): You're even able to have kindness for an assassin like me...
And I said that you were just a souless robot...

Inspector Tawashi: It's not just that, Alexa...
Shinobu had left a message before the day which you killed him...
He wished to quit the police and live a peaceful life to spent more of his time with you...

Alexa: Because of my dispair...
I ruined both his dreams and myself...

Inspector Tawashi looks around and...

Inspector Tawashi: That's the flower of love!

Atom: Let's get outta here, Alexa!

Atom helps Alexa to walk and both leave the hideout...

Atom: Alexa...
Let me use the antidote on you...

Alexa (agonizing): Don't do it, Atom!!

Atom: But, if I don't then you'll die!!

Alexa (agonizing): Don't worry about me, Atom...
The "Flower of Life" will wither once the antidote is extracted just once!
If you do that, then your friend will die...

Inspector Tawashi: That flower only bloom in the spring of the brazilian rain forest...
How did you managed to keep it in japanese soil??

Alexa (agonizing): I was a botanist and I learned how to cultive the flower artificially, however it'll die if the antidote is extracted anyway...

Atom: Alexa...

Alexa (agonizing): Atom and Inspector Tawashi, don't worry about me...
Now that I remembered such a beautiful feeling...
I can...
I can die happilly...

Atom (shocked): Alexa!!
You must not say these things!!

Alexa: A child may only last 12 hours if poisoned by the "Black Widow"...
Which means that there is still time...

Alexa takes out her ring and...

Alexa: Please, give that ring for her once she awoke up..

Atom (who get the ring in his hands): Alexa...

Alexa starts walking and...

Alexa (agonizing and walking): Even if I survive, I would be only a criminal trapped in jail forever...
My crimes were unexcusable...

Inspector Tawashi take his time to call reinforcements while Atom follows Alexa...

Inspector Tawashi (with his communicator): I and Atom survived the enemy's attack and we now have the antidote, please bring reinforcements!
Unfortunatelly I've lost my weapons when my patrol car exploded.

Chief Nakamura (from the other line): Affirmative!
I'll bring the robot corps for reinforcements!
So, tell me your current location!

Atom leaves Inspector Tawashi Behind and...

Atom: Alexa, do not go!!

Alexa keeps walking away and...

Alexa: Atom, please do not forget me...

Suddenly, Katari's soldiers finally spots Alexa and attack...

Terrorist 1: She escaped from the jail!!

Terrorist 2: Let's get rid of her!!

However, Alexa knock the soldiers off and goes after Katari who is using a piloted robot...

Katari (inside the robot): Your dirty witch!!

Atom flies after Alexa, but the soldiers start shooting at him...

Soldier 3: You're not getting in the way!!

Soldier 4: You'll be the next!!

Atom (evading the attacks): Oh, no!!

Alexa (who keep apphroaching Katari's piloted robot): Shinobu...
Please embrace me gently!!

Then Katari launch a bomb at Alexa and a huge explosion occur...

Atom (shocked): Alexaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!!

Atom goes at the place of the explosion and...

Atom (crying and looking at the ring): Why everything had to end like this?!?

Katari (in the piloted robot): That death suit a dirty assassin for hire!!

Atom (looking revolted at Katari): Do not insult Alexa's death!!
Never insult the meaning of love and redemption!!

Inspector Tawashi arrives near the place of the explosion...

Inspector Tawashi (shocked): Alexa...
May your soul rest in peace!

Suddenly, Chief Nakamura and the robot corps arrives...

Chief Nakamura (in a patrol car which lands): We came to give reinforcements!!

Atom: Inspector Tawashi and Chief Nakamura...
Please take the "Flower of Life" to the hospital quickly!

Inspector Tawashi: So be it, Atom!
The robot corps will give you the necessary backup!
They have stun guns to capture human criminals!

Chief Nakamura: You have permission to fire!
Capture the terrorists!!

Delta: Yes, sir!!

Atom: Alright!
I'll fight Katari!!

Katari (in his piloted robot): I'm not letting you bring the antidote!!

Katari launch another bomb...

Atom (firing his arm cannon at the bomb): You'll don't stop us from saving Mimi's life!!

Katari (in his piloted robot): Damn you!!
Always trying to get in the way!!

The patrol car quickly leaves the mountainside area while the robot corps start fighting the criminals...

Terrorist 1 (being hit by the stun gun): Ahhhhhhhh!!

Terrorist 2: Damn you, stupid robots!!

The terrorist attempt to fire at Delta who dodge and counter with a stun blast...

Delta: Take it!!

Terrorist 3: Aaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhh!!

Atom goes flying at Katari's robot and...

Atom (flying): Katari!!
I'll never forgive you!!!

Katari (in his piloted robot): Your little piece of scrap metal!!
I'll destroy you for good!!

Katari attempt to punch Atom with his robot unit, put he evade and rip off the robot's left arm...

Katari (in his piloted robot): Curse you!!

Katari attempt to fire at Atom with his robot's arm cannon, but...

Atom (firing his arm cannon): Alexa said that police officers don't knew true justice...
However, it's YOU who DON'T know TRUE JUSTICE!!!

The robot's arm cannon is destroyed and...

Katari (in the damaged piloted robot): CURSE YOU!!!

Atom then do a powerful punch which pierce the robot unit...

Katari (in the damaged piloted robot): Yes, kill me!!
Your dirty robot!!!

However Atom quickly goes at the cockpit and take Katari away...

Atom (grabbing Katari and flying): I refuse to do such a thing which would only benefit your dirty organization!!

Atom brings Katari who is restrained by the robot corps who captured his henchmen...

Delta: You're under arrest for terrorism and murder!

Katari (being restrained): Shut up, dirty robot!!
Robots have no right of arresting humans!!

Atom: They does!!
And in special heartless humans like you who use and insult other people's feelings!!

At the hospital...

Doctor: Ohhh!!
This is the cure!!
Let me use the antidote quickly!!

The antidote is applied in Mimi and...

Mimi (who start to awoke up): I am alive?

Doctor: The antidote worked...
That's a miracle...

Inspector Tawashi (showing the wither "Flower of Life"): Mimi...
That flower was given by Alexa who was the same woman who fired the dart at you.
She refused treatment after being poisoned in order to let you have a chance of living...
So, live happilly in memory of her...

Mimi (in the bed): So that's what happened...
I'll promise that I'll take good care of myself and tell everyone the news.

Several hours later, a man start building a grave stone for Alexa while both Atom, Mimi and Uran pay respects for her...

Atom (giving the ring to Mimi): Alexa wanted you to have this ring...
That ring represents Alexa's love which she could not forgot even after she killed her own husband.
So, take good care of it, Mimi!

Mimi: I'll...
I'll keep it safe with me!
She did awful things, but was still able to remember love and died for it...

Mimi then looks at Uran and...

Mimi: Strange...
While I was still poisoned, I had a dream with you Uran...
And you said that your brother would bring the antidote...

Uran: So, it was the reason which you were smiling when I visited your hospital room?

Mimi: What?
So you visited me, after all?

Uran (blushing): Yes, I thought that would be nice to see how you were doing!

Atom: Anyway...
With everything which happened I learned something very important...

Uran: What's it, big brother?

Atom: I've learned that no matter how strong I am...
I still cannot save everyone...
But, even so I cannot give up the hope in the future!

Uran: Big brother...
Don't feel bad...
You made Alexa remember her love, so you saved her anyway...

Atom: Thank you, Uran!

The stonemason finish the job and...

Stonemason: I've wrote something according to Inspector Tawashi's request.

Atom (reading the grave stone): "Here lies Alexa, the one who remembered love."

Suddenly a shooting star is seem in the sky...

Mimi: A shooting star...
Could be that Alexa's spirit?

Uran: It's so beautiful!

Atom: If is her spirit, then I hope she found love in the other life...

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Quote:Katari then change his plans to lure Atom and Inspector Tawashi to his hideout alone, otherwise the "Flower of Life" will be burnt.
With this, he expect Alexa to kill Atom since he is unable to fight humans.
To make things worse, Mimi only have 12 hours of life if the antidote is not given...


Atom looks at a ring and cries...

Atom (crying): Why everything had to end like that?

Atom then remembers of somebody's final words...

"Please, give that ring for her once she awoke up."

There is a special reason for having that ring in his hands and is the reason which now Atom cries...

Everything started at Dr. Ochanomizu's house...

Atom (getting ready to leave): Well, I'm off!

Robita: Atom, do not forget to take a energy capsule with you.
You may need it later!

Atom (getting the energy capsule): Thanks, Robita!
I'll make sure to use it when my energy goes low.

Formatting. When posting such script-like things, use bold and cursive to give the text a better structure so the reader doesn't get lost in a wall of lines. I usually use bold for the name of whoever speaks and cursive for non-spoken text and action descriptions.

That aside there are lots of grammar and general wording problems, I assume you are no native english speaker.

It may also be a good idea to structure your text into shorter chapters.
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