Paper Mario animations

[Kosheh]

I uh, I have to be honest - it's actually really tough to read through this time around. >_o Like, I get what you're going for with Red, but his dialogue feels extremely forced now. :/

Like - okay, in short you've written the characters with too much character. On a scale of 1 to 10, you just cranked them up to like 11.
(Rather, shoot for like a 5 or ...uh, 7 tops)

Also uh, seems like you're splitting hairs a bit with some of those points but uh
* Kosheh shrugs

- I don't know how I feel about Bombette being called the "pink Bob-omb." It just seems a little generic. I only chose "dame" to fit with Red's habit of disrespecting others. I could always go with "chick" or "babe" instead. Probably the former since "babe" would suggest that Red has a crush on her.

I can't say I memorized the Paper Mario script from my teenage years, but there's not really anything about Bombette's gender that sticks out besides her name - and I'm pretty sure she didn't speak to the Koopa Bros either (only to Mario) so there's no concrete way that Red would know her gender. I also went with the "generic" approach as it flowed better with his dialogue.

- As for using joke weapons for the Koopa Bros., I'm actually fine with that. The only problem is that it's hard to pull it off in this short. The only one actually fighting is Black, but he is way too serious to consider using anything besides actual ninja gear unless he has to improvise. This might end up as something I need to save for later shorts, but I can at least imagine this concept clearly for the remaining three Koopa Bros. Red will try to pass off his joke weapons as the real deal and gets irritated if someone points it out. Green is a bit more modest about it, but he is actually successful with using these kind of weapons. As for Yellow, I imagine him using goofy devices made from discarded junk that are similar to the ones seen throughout Ed, Edd, 'n' Eddy.

It doesn't have to be used in THIS short - just think about it. lol it's a one-off gag
Like if they threaten to fight Mario, just have them show up, and be all "Now we're REALLY ready to rumble!!" and have them all pose with their weapons, but then be like "na we were just using them for show"