Ok, let's see how this is:
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I appreciate the critique, but I was a bit lost on some of it I'll admit. Like for example, the whole multiple light source thing I don't see. I feel that the light source is top left, and I wasn't sure how many place really had it coming from the bottom at all. I did notice that the face could be read as if it was coming from bottom though (I think this happened because I exaggerated the shadow from her bangs too much). Yet I kept most of the rest unchanged, because unless I'm not seeing something right, I think it's fairly consistently coming from the top left.
The near pillow shaded part was me again exagerating shadows I think. I was going for the effect of the hair there on the right being more towards the light source, with the darker stuff on the left being the shadow cast by her body, and the darker shade on the right being where her hair curves away from the light source. Clearly it didn't look that way, and I figured it would be best just to make her hair just not flow out like that.
Fixed up the shape of the chin and neck so hopefully those are more noticeable. I touched up on the outlines. Everything actually had colored outlines, they just were a bit too dark I guess. I lightened them up, and worked on shading the outlines better too so some were highlighted. Darkened the sleeve outlines of course too.
I was using a reference for the dress for the legs, so I'm not really sure what to do with them otherwise. I added a little bit near her foot as far as a highlight to make it look more like cloth. I was trying a lot of things with the rest though, and none of it was coming out. I mean with the wide stance, the dress would fall between her knees more and create that darker area, yes?
So yeah, I tried my best, but I guess I'm a bit lost still, unless the few chances I did make have made it better.
Oh, and Koh, don't worry, I had planned to add more frames of course. It was just a general idea of what it was going to end up being. Once I get the base down, then I'll work on adding extra frames.
I appreciate the critique, but I was a bit lost on some of it I'll admit. Like for example, the whole multiple light source thing I don't see. I feel that the light source is top left, and I wasn't sure how many place really had it coming from the bottom at all. I did notice that the face could be read as if it was coming from bottom though (I think this happened because I exaggerated the shadow from her bangs too much). Yet I kept most of the rest unchanged, because unless I'm not seeing something right, I think it's fairly consistently coming from the top left.
The near pillow shaded part was me again exagerating shadows I think. I was going for the effect of the hair there on the right being more towards the light source, with the darker stuff on the left being the shadow cast by her body, and the darker shade on the right being where her hair curves away from the light source. Clearly it didn't look that way, and I figured it would be best just to make her hair just not flow out like that.
Fixed up the shape of the chin and neck so hopefully those are more noticeable. I touched up on the outlines. Everything actually had colored outlines, they just were a bit too dark I guess. I lightened them up, and worked on shading the outlines better too so some were highlighted. Darkened the sleeve outlines of course too.
I was using a reference for the dress for the legs, so I'm not really sure what to do with them otherwise. I added a little bit near her foot as far as a highlight to make it look more like cloth. I was trying a lot of things with the rest though, and none of it was coming out. I mean with the wide stance, the dress would fall between her knees more and create that darker area, yes?
So yeah, I tried my best, but I guess I'm a bit lost still, unless the few chances I did make have made it better.
Oh, and Koh, don't worry, I had planned to add more frames of course. It was just a general idea of what it was going to end up being. Once I get the base down, then I'll work on adding extra frames.