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Edited some things.
Took out the mayor's name since it's not important.
Fixed some terms.
Word "people" omitted from first parts Big Grin
Have some poetry:

Hal Jordan Remembers

Struggling to stand up from his bed,
memories of clouds beneath his feet
ensorcelled by emerald light
visit him for an instant.

Pissing on a gray pan
and mumbling in the dark
words which for two scores
have not been quite right,
he glances at his right hand.

But nothing happens.
For forty years, nothing has.

He hobbles back to his bed.
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