I'm no expert at either of the styles you were going for, although I can easily tell you that the first one doesn't fit Ahruon's style. It seems pillowshaded in many of the areas, such as the hair. The lineart is also very rough, which isn't present in Ahruon's style, the areas I'm talking about are the lines around the arms, legs/pants, hair.. Everywhere, basically. And I have no idea why there are several lightsources, I mean, the lightsource is coming from below the character in some areas, above in a couple places, and on the sides on the pants.
That being said, I have no knowledge of Disgaea style, no I can't crit that much.
EDIT: Just saw your edited post, Ahruon only uses rough outlines on places that call for it. Your sprite has rough outline almost everywhere.
That being said, I have no knowledge of Disgaea style, no I can't crit that much.
EDIT: Just saw your edited post, Ahruon only uses rough outlines on places that call for it. Your sprite has rough outline almost everywhere.