05-18-2016, 03:15 PM
you keep jumping between past and present tense, which is really distracting. Your sentence structure is just really confusing in general. Is English your first language?
also, it's hilarious that your Super Smash Bros. origin story focuses on a random Sonic character that has nothing at all to do with the Smash Bros. series. You can take that as a criticism or a compliment, depending on what you're going for here
also, it's hilarious that your Super Smash Bros. origin story focuses on a random Sonic character that has nothing at all to do with the Smash Bros. series. You can take that as a criticism or a compliment, depending on what you're going for here