Story: A Squires Ambition. [Writing]

[phlashblazer]

Hmm, that's the thing though... I get your feedback, but I also want to see what YOU could do with it. Patient was kind enough to send me a rewrite and it was awesome! I don't know, I was really impressed by his rewrite to tell you the truth, so what I'm getting at is I want to take a little bit from everyone and kind of see the cool points of their writing styles. Does make any sense at all? But, I do get what you mean, thanks for the feedback!