09-21-2008, 12:23 AM
I think he means that you're missing punctuation here and there. Especially in your contractions. Your pronoun "I" is lower case when it should be capitalized.
Also you might want to change "Mega Man,Oil Man" to "Mega Man: Oil Man" as you are, in fact, introducing him.
Normally, I don't perform grammar check on other people. <=P
Also, for an edit of Mega Man in 8bit, I don't see how you could've gone wrong, but somehow you did. I know his head is drop shaped, but for some reason, your shaping of his head is off. It seems that it bows inward instead of outward in the back of his head. Try to round it out.
The lower half of his face shouldn't be all peach colored. It makes the drop shaped head look like a helmet instead. Try coloring his entire face the main head color, then taking the peach color you originally used for the face and use that to make a small oval outline where his mouth should be. This will make it more believable. If you don't get what I mean, I'll look for an example.
Also, judging by his art there, he appears to have a light gray color in between the main areas in which have dark blue. You can use the gray from Hard Man's sprite in order to fill in those lighter dark blue areas on the sprite with.
From what I can see: the scarf he has isn't exactly split at the end as you put in your sprite, but entirely whole despite how it looks in the art. The position of the scarf is giving off the impression of a split end to his scarf. It is wavy, not split as you put in your sprite.
Also, you could change the orange to the color of the face as you're only using orange once on the whole sprite. It might work in 16 and 32 bit games where you can get away with a one time use for a single color, but not in 8 bit. It sticks out in an ugly way.
This is pretty much all of the constructive criticism I can give you at this point. It's your choice whether you want to heed it or not.
Also you might want to change "Mega Man,Oil Man" to "Mega Man: Oil Man" as you are, in fact, introducing him.
Normally, I don't perform grammar check on other people. <=P
Also, for an edit of Mega Man in 8bit, I don't see how you could've gone wrong, but somehow you did. I know his head is drop shaped, but for some reason, your shaping of his head is off. It seems that it bows inward instead of outward in the back of his head. Try to round it out.
The lower half of his face shouldn't be all peach colored. It makes the drop shaped head look like a helmet instead. Try coloring his entire face the main head color, then taking the peach color you originally used for the face and use that to make a small oval outline where his mouth should be. This will make it more believable. If you don't get what I mean, I'll look for an example.
Also, judging by his art there, he appears to have a light gray color in between the main areas in which have dark blue. You can use the gray from Hard Man's sprite in order to fill in those lighter dark blue areas on the sprite with.
From what I can see: the scarf he has isn't exactly split at the end as you put in your sprite, but entirely whole despite how it looks in the art. The position of the scarf is giving off the impression of a split end to his scarf. It is wavy, not split as you put in your sprite.
Also, you could change the orange to the color of the face as you're only using orange once on the whole sprite. It might work in 16 and 32 bit games where you can get away with a one time use for a single color, but not in 8 bit. It sticks out in an ugly way.
This is pretty much all of the constructive criticism I can give you at this point. It's your choice whether you want to heed it or not.
