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(Issue 208!) JournalistMan.exe
well, I can help with some hardxXxcore proofreading if you're going to fix up your article~



4 things that need to be included in more games...:
1) Customisation (should probably be spelled "Customization")
"...customised..." --- shouldn't it be "customized"?

3) Local Multiplayer
"But now consoles have integrated internet, a lot of games publishers..." --- should probably be "But now that consoles have integrated internet, a lot of game publishers..."
"...and has it's place..." --- and has it is place

Blur:
"All the real world locations and cars to please the realistic racing enthusiast,..." --- fragment :C
"With both local and online multiplayer, what's not to" --- cut off

NMH2: Deadly Struggle
"...with a beam-katana; once the #1 Ranked assassin in the US until he retired to watch anime and wrestling DVDs" --- this is just awkward to me :/ Maybe get rid of the semicolon and switch in "who was" ?

Sin and Punishment
"...nonesnsical plot..." --- small typo

Fist of the North Star
"...Fist of the North Star..." --- italics problem

"The transition to 3Dhas..." --- 3Dhas

"...ecellently..."
"...persuade you to give it wa watch..." --- small typos here too

"...rediculous opening." --- shouldn't it be "ridiculous"?



And this is all I'm seeing that you should look into fixing. I've noticed a few semicolons here and there that could easily be removed, but they're probably just as fine where they are now
HAVE I BEEN MISLEAD?? [Image: TeamStory.gif] THE DREAM ISN'T DEAD???

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(Issue 208!) JournalistMan.exe - by GrooveMan.exe - 09-24-2008, 04:21 AM
RE: I R GAMEZ JOURNALIST - by GrooveMan.exe - 05-18-2010, 04:47 PM
RE: I R GAMEZ JOURNALIST - by GrooveMan.exe - 06-04-2010, 04:17 PM
RE: (Issue 207!) JournalistMan.exe - by triptych - 06-04-2010, 04:31 PM
RE: (Issue 207!) JournalistMan.exe - by Kitsu - 06-04-2010, 04:37 PM
RE: (Issue 207!) JournalistMan.exe - by Rosencrantz - 06-04-2010, 05:11 PM
Time Hollow - by GrooveMan.exe - 10-16-2008, 11:47 AM
RE: Time Hollow - by Phantom Killah - 10-18-2008, 04:38 PM
RE: Time Hollow - by Geo the Fox - 10-18-2008, 05:34 PM
RE: Indie and the Temple of Homebrew - by Adam - 02-07-2009, 07:32 PM
RE: Indie and the Temple of Homebrew - by Koopaul - 02-09-2009, 10:49 AM
Co-op Games Across Generations - by GrooveMan.exe - 02-25-2010, 07:36 AM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Chutzpar - 02-25-2010, 07:47 AM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Dazz - 02-25-2010, 07:54 AM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Dazz - 02-25-2010, 08:07 AM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Jovian-12 - 02-25-2010, 11:28 AM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Alpha Six - 02-25-2010, 11:44 AM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Kriven - 02-25-2010, 12:13 PM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Ark Kuvis - 02-25-2010, 12:20 PM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Jovian-12 - 02-25-2010, 12:24 PM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Shawn - 02-25-2010, 03:13 PM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Rai - 02-25-2010, 05:15 PM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Alpha Six - 02-25-2010, 05:34 PM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Alpha Six - 02-25-2010, 05:38 PM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Helmo - 02-25-2010, 05:44 PM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Helmo - 02-25-2010, 06:05 PM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Alex - 02-25-2010, 06:44 PM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by FRET - 02-25-2010, 07:27 PM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Helmo - 02-25-2010, 07:41 PM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Koopaul - 02-25-2010, 10:21 PM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Gold - 02-26-2010, 06:01 AM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Goemar - 02-26-2010, 01:22 PM
RE: Co-op Games Across Generations - by Gold - 02-26-2010, 02:14 PM
I R GAMEZ JOURNALIST - by GrooveMan.exe - 05-05-2010, 05:23 PM
RE: I R GAMEZ JOURNALIST - by Marth - 05-05-2010, 08:27 PM
RE: I R GAMEZ JOURNALIST - by Gwen - 05-05-2010, 08:48 PM
RE: I R GAMEZ JOURNALIST - by Helmo - 05-05-2010, 08:49 PM
RE: I R GAMEZ JOURNALIST - by ThePortalGuru - 05-05-2010, 09:14 PM
RE: I R GAMEZ JOURNALIST - by Woppet* - 05-05-2010, 10:17 PM
RE: I R GAMEZ JOURNALIST - by GrooveMan.exe - 05-06-2010, 02:18 AM
RE: I R GAMEZ JOURNALIST - by Vipershark - 05-06-2010, 02:57 AM
RE: I R GAMEZ JOURNALIST - by Alpha Six - 05-06-2010, 03:04 AM
RE: I R GAMEZ JOURNALIST - by Stooben - 05-06-2010, 03:02 AM
RE: I R GAMEZ JOURNALIST - by Ultimecia - 05-06-2010, 03:54 AM
RE: I R GAMEZ JOURNALIST - by Teddy The Elite - 05-07-2010, 09:39 AM

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