Portal, my fanfic

[iDan]

Well, as brutally honest as that was, it helps. No one's been able to give me a good critique, given as they only pay attention to the drawings. So, I admit, I should've been more careful with the written version as possible. I didn't include the real first chapter, 'cause it was old, and needed fixing. And, it had nothing to do with the story. But, it was original. So, I'll fix absolutely everything I can before the 3rd chapter is out. I'll post the manga/comic as soon as I get my scanner. I'm bad a stories, just the drawings...

But, eh... I admit I would've preferred if you didn't go with the insults.