Your Advice Back Then Till Now! [Comic Series]

[SamsterBoy]

Okay, I know the people of PT can be quite harsh to people when others make comic's, and I've shown quite a few comic series that I've done. I must agree that all the ones back then were crap, and I'd like to thank most of you who actually shared useful advice back in the day. Now, you guys gave me some helpful pointers, and I learned a few new tricks after I was gone for a year from PT.

Remember, this comic is only 4 pages long, and I've only made two as of now. The other two will hopefully come during this week.

Now, I ask you this. Have I slightly improved from what I showed a year and a half ago?

Comic's Back Then:

First Time I showed you my comic series.
Second Time I showed you another comic series.
Third Time I showed you another comic series. Again.

Comic's Now

Page 1
Page 2

Current Page:


Please Real C+C. Hopefully, the same helpful people from back then.

[Zee]

I'll be honest, it's not very good, you're mixing sprites and series and all this stuff. It feels tacky, underdone and slapped together all shipshod and such. It's really... blah, I mean it's not funny, there's no plot, and it's really boring overall.

[Alex]

Make sure you use the right usage. You're saying your when you mean you're.

Also, I didn't really understand anything. The characters just seem to fly out of nowhere.

[SamsterBoy]

Zee Wrote:I'll be honest, it's not very good, you're mixing sprites and series and all this stuff. It feels tacky, underdone and slapped together all shipshod and such. It's really... blah, I mean it's not funny, there's no plot, and it's really boring overall.

I mixed the sprites for the 2nd page for the LULZ, apparently the funny didn't come across at that point. I apologize there. The first page was based off a Brawl Fight. I agree with mixing sprites & not funny cause many people like different kinds of humour (not to mention I'm no comedian myself), but...

What do you mean no Plot? There's a plot, it's just not a lot is really explained in the first two pages, and all will be fully explained when the two other pages come by.

Alex Wrote:Make sure you use the right usage. You're saying your when you mean you're.

Also, I didn't really understand anything. The characters just seem to fly out of nowhere.

That I can fix no problem. Thanks for that pointer.

Characters fly out of nowhere. I'm guessing you mean Trunks and Krillin scene. That scene was made a bit random, but it was meant to be funny.

Thanks for the advice guys. Anymore would be awesome.

One Question: What do you guys think about the overall layout?

[Zee]

SamsterBoy Wrote:One Question: What do you guys think about the overall layout?

Awful, too much scrolling and too many panels to get across so little information.