02-10-2012, 01:22 AM
In the last stanza you have two lines that are longer than the others, compared to the first stanza where all the lines are about the same.
I don't know if that was intentional though.
Also (OPINION) you could extend your songs to be longer and include a long guitar solo with some dark-sounding mumbled growled lyrics. Even if it's repetition I think it'd sound cool (though I don't know much sludgecore so I'm not a very good help with that!)
I don't know if that was intentional though.
Also (OPINION) you could extend your songs to be longer and include a long guitar solo with some dark-sounding mumbled growled lyrics. Even if it's repetition I think it'd sound cool (though I don't know much sludgecore so I'm not a very good help with that!)