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Initiating Poetry Sequence
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many lols were had. very entertaining, atm i dont see any errors because its 11PM and im tired. actually, i removed some syllables and minor errors. still tired.
friendly tip, rhyming lines should share similar syllable count, lest they sound out of place Wink
also, i noticed that your syllable count is uneven, so consistency and even numbers also factor in.
of course, you have every right to ignore me as i am getting a D in english because i hate that class...
Thanked by: [robo9], Zadaben


Messages In This Thread
Initiating Poetry Sequence - by [robo9] - 05-15-2012, 12:32 AM
RE: Attempt at a Poem - by alexmach1 - 05-15-2012, 12:58 AM
RE: Attempt at a Poem - by Lexou Duck - 05-15-2012, 02:05 AM
RE: Attempt at a Poem - by [robo9] - 05-15-2012, 07:07 AM
RE: Attempt at a Poem - by [robo9] - 05-15-2012, 10:29 PM
RE: Attempt at a Poem - by alexmach1 - 05-15-2012, 10:54 PM
RE: Robo Poetry - by [robo9] - 05-16-2012, 07:56 PM
RE: Robo Poetry - by Lexou Duck - 05-17-2012, 02:11 AM
RE: Robo Poetry - by [robo9] - 07-09-2012, 11:23 PM
RE: RoboStream [o] - by [robo9] - 07-26-2012, 11:23 PM
RE: RoboStream [o] - by Garamonde - 07-27-2012, 07:56 AM
RE: RoboStream [o] - by Baegal - 07-27-2012, 11:45 AM
RE: RoboStream [o] - by Previous - 07-27-2012, 01:51 PM
RE: Initiaing Poetry Sequence - by Hoeloe - 09-06-2012, 07:50 AM
RE: Initiating Poetry Sequence - by [robo9] - 12-04-2013, 11:47 PM

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