Something I might actually use... Tried again.

[Hoeloe]

Yup, I see that. Should be able to fix that with a bit of work to the palette.

EDIT: The desaturation is part of the style, but nonetheless, I've worked at the palette a little, and I think the body is a little more readable now. I can't seem to get the scarf to look any better, though, without introducing the highlight colour, which I don't want to do because it defies the logic of the lightsource (which is from the hip).

Here's what I've done in any case. I also brightened the girl's ponytail, because it made no sense to be that dark, considering the lightsource.