Meet Zoe Jabberwocky

[Tellis]

Alright so... I wasn't exactly sure how to tackle what you guys suggested but I gave it my best shot, I guess. I tried to add some more shading to the face and fixing the outline (not really sure what you meant by the face line being too steep, Gors...) and yeah, I guess I did end up banding (had to look that up ) so I kind of reset the sweatshirt to just one shade and redid the shading from there, though I'm not sure if it's any better.
I haven't entirely fixed it up, I know that, but am I at least on the right track?