07-01-2011, 11:25 PM
well, the bending of the vine is alright, but the shading is very awkward. It seems to me you haven't hue shifted at all, which makes it look pretty flat. the shading on the head is not very round at all, i believe the spriting guide on the main board has a tutorial or something for that.
don't use black outlines to outline the markings. it looks bland and it detracts from your sprite.
the vine is awkward too, because the way you shaded it is very pillowed. it also bulges a little in the last frame. you should also try to fix the outline itself, it's pretty obvious you used an MS Paint circle. in my personal choice, i think you should sel-out your outlines, especially the ones inside. however, i think anti alias will also do pretty well.
the mouth is the most awkward part; i won't go over the animation of it as i'm not too good with it either, but why is it crooked, when it's implies the mouth goes either straight up or horizontally? also, where are the teeth? the way it opens it's mouth isn't symmetrical either. You'd be better off making a third shade of white to blend it in with the rest of it's mouth, at the moment the parting of the lips contrasts very highly and you can tell it's pixelated.
i must say, you do have potential. your sprites remind me of when i was young. study up on how light works, and learn to build things from simple shapes. also learn to imply shape and form with the amount of space you have. If you can, i'd suggest learning to shade the basic shapes (ie, spheres cubes and cylinders) before you apply it to pixel work. trust me, once you know how light works it will be a lot simpler.
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i made a quick edit for you to see what i mean. you also might want to refrain from default MS Paint colors and eye-blinding background colors, while i can stand it, others may not.
don't use black outlines to outline the markings. it looks bland and it detracts from your sprite.
the vine is awkward too, because the way you shaded it is very pillowed. it also bulges a little in the last frame. you should also try to fix the outline itself, it's pretty obvious you used an MS Paint circle. in my personal choice, i think you should sel-out your outlines, especially the ones inside. however, i think anti alias will also do pretty well.
the mouth is the most awkward part; i won't go over the animation of it as i'm not too good with it either, but why is it crooked, when it's implies the mouth goes either straight up or horizontally? also, where are the teeth? the way it opens it's mouth isn't symmetrical either. You'd be better off making a third shade of white to blend it in with the rest of it's mouth, at the moment the parting of the lips contrasts very highly and you can tell it's pixelated.
i must say, you do have potential. your sprites remind me of when i was young. study up on how light works, and learn to build things from simple shapes. also learn to imply shape and form with the amount of space you have. If you can, i'd suggest learning to shade the basic shapes (ie, spheres cubes and cylinders) before you apply it to pixel work. trust me, once you know how light works it will be a lot simpler.
i made a quick edit for you to see what i mean. you also might want to refrain from default MS Paint colors and eye-blinding background colors, while i can stand it, others may not.